That was interesting. I enjoyed the way that the fic was basically made up of scenes throughout Azula and Ty Lee's lives; though I enjoy a flowing, all-in-one-time fic as much as the next person, sometimes it's just nice to see glimpses. I particuarly liked the first one--Azula totally taking advantage of Ty Lee's childhood innocence was slightly hilarious, in an Azula sort of way. But my favorite scene had to be the third one, as the description of Azula's interest in fire was great and their kiss was fantastic. The ending, though, felt odd...not entirely out of place or anything, just kind of "wow, ok, that was a little sudden". It's understandable, though, as scene fic endings have always seemed to come up on one quickly. It might just be me, too, so.
It all was nicely IC. Azula stayed dominating and manipulative, Ty Lee stayed loyal, and Mai's brief appearances/descriptions were spot-on. Her comment on how Ty Lee gave people too much of a chance and she saw good in people when there wasn't any was particuarly fitting, considering the fact that it relates to Azula amazingly well. In general, it was just nicely characterized.
One thing I was having problems with as I read, though, were the scattered grammatical issues. Some sentences should have been separated with a semi-colon instead of a comma and there was a mix-up with "too" and "to" and a misplaced period after consort in the first scene. Nothing major, though, just a few problems that don't greatly impact readability. Besides that, though, the writing was good. I was introduced to a few new words, which is always a nice thing.
In general, I enjoyed this. Hope you don't mind the long review from a stranger. ^.^'
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That was interesting. I enjoyed the way that the fic was basically made up of scenes throughout Azula and Ty Lee's lives; though I enjoy a flowing, all-in-one-time fic as much as the next person, sometimes it's just nice to see glimpses. I particuarly liked the first one--Azula totally taking advantage of Ty Lee's childhood innocence was slightly hilarious, in an Azula sort of way. But my favorite scene had to be the third one, as the description of Azula's interest in fire was great and their kiss was fantastic. The ending, though, felt odd...not entirely out of place or anything, just kind of "wow, ok, that was a little sudden". It's understandable, though, as scene fic endings have always seemed to come up on one quickly. It might just be me, too, so.
It all was nicely IC. Azula stayed dominating and manipulative, Ty Lee stayed loyal, and Mai's brief appearances/descriptions were spot-on. Her comment on how Ty Lee gave people too much of a chance and she saw good in people when there wasn't any was particuarly fitting, considering the fact that it relates to Azula amazingly well. In general, it was just nicely characterized.
One thing I was having problems with as I read, though, were the scattered grammatical issues. Some sentences should have been separated with a semi-colon instead of a comma and there was a mix-up with "too" and "to" and a misplaced period after consort in the first scene. Nothing major, though, just a few problems that don't greatly impact readability. Besides that, though, the writing was good. I was introduced to a few new words, which is always a nice thing.
In general, I enjoyed this. Hope you don't mind the long review from a stranger. ^.^'